July 3rd 1608 - Brent S.
Brent S.
 
I am finally in America.  There are sights I've never seen before so many wonders, I can't count,however, we must press forward.
Mrs. Rios
9/1/2010 03:01:46

It sounds like I'm reading a diary. Great use of voice. Try to add a little more emotion and details. I like the way you're adding in the facts you've researched.

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